Creideas
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I'm from the peat water - known to be bold
Out of the Dark Stream my name was foretold,
I’m from the peat water – known to be bold.
I am the Serpent, chasing its tail,
joined in a circle it cannot fail.
I am of the seashore,
the mountains and woods,
which is where I should be:
as free as a hawk,
hunting its prey,
or delving as a mole –
hid neath the clay.
I am the pipes,
a Celtic lament,
whisky and black beer –
made to ferment;
or as fresh baked bread,
hot from the oven,
my hidden self,
sung to me by a woman.
I am a number,
linked to Heaven,
the mystical root,
known as a seven.
I am from the North
where people were free,
I honour the God
they nailed to a tree.
©D G Moody 2022
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The rhyming scheme is really impressive, and this tone of a poet is my favorite. The last stanza was amazing and especially the last line, I honor the god they nailed to a tree is just commendable. Appreciate it.
Thank you Mike. I first wrote this around 27 years ago, as a challenge with my poet cousin; then I put it aside and found it again recently. Allen has been kind to feature it here.
And we are lucky to read it here.
Like lots of things, Dougie, they improve with age, and this is no exception. Really good poetry, my friend. Well done.
ALLEN
Thank you both Allen and Mike. I must confess to having tinkered with it on and off for years, and as it’s personal I worried about it being also egotistical; but there you go that’s negative egoism – move over Uriah Heep!
Me too, like the last two stanzas. The rhyme schemes, Alternate rhyme and simple 4-line rhyme you used here are really perfect. It makes language sound more beautiful and thoughtfully-composed, like music.
Thanks Amanda. Yes, it is a basic structure, with a beat from the short lines and allusive language; an attempt to honour my Celtic roots.
Best….Dougie
A wonderful poem and to think you wrote this poem 27 years ago shows how great you are . The rhyme schemes are great and i love the last two stanzas. Thabk you
Thank you Kiula, for your kind comments. To be fair, I have revised it several times.