Creideas
- August 11, 2022
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Out of the Dark Stream my name was foretold, I’m from the peat water – known to be bold. I am the Serpent, chasing its tail, joined in a circle it cannot fail. I am of the seashore, the mountains and woods, which is where I should be: as free as a hawk, hunting its prey, or delving as a mole – hid neath the clay. I am the pipes, a Celtic lament, whisky and black beer – made to ferment; or as fresh baked bread, hot from the oven, my hidden self, sung to me by a woman. I am a number, linked to Heaven, the mystical root, known as a seven. I am from the North where people were free, I honour the God they nailed to a tree. ©D G Moody 2023
Mike
1 year agoThe rhyming scheme is really impressive, and this tone of a poet is my favorite. The last stanza was amazing and especially the last line, I honor the god they nailed to a tree is just commendable. Appreciate it.
Douglas Moody
1 year agoThank you Mike. I first wrote this around 27 years ago, as a challenge with my poet cousin; then I put it aside and found it again recently. Allen has been kind to feature it here.
mike
1 year agoAnd we are lucky to read it here.
Allen Ansell
1 year agoLike lots of things, Dougie, they improve with age, and this is no exception. Really good poetry, my friend. Well done.
ALLEN
Douglas Moody
1 year agoThank you both Allen and Mike. I must confess to having tinkered with it on and off for years, and as it’s personal I worried about it being also egotistical; but there you go that’s negative egoism – move over Uriah Heep!
Amanda
1 year agoMe too, like the last two stanzas. The rhyme schemes, Alternate rhyme and simple 4-line rhyme you used here are really perfect. It makes language sound more beautiful and thoughtfully-composed, like music.
Douglas Moody
1 year agoThanks Amanda. Yes, it is a basic structure, with a beat from the short lines and allusive language; an attempt to honour my Celtic roots.
Best….Dougie
Kiula Joel Shagile
1 year agoA wonderful poem and to think you wrote this poem 27 years ago shows how great you are . The rhyme schemes are great and i love the last two stanzas. Thabk you
Douglas Moody
1 year agoThank you Kiula, for your kind comments. To be fair, I have revised it several times.